i anticipate while staring at the door ...
the wind passes by very firmly
like the touch of a feather
the silence dint make a sound
as i dint feel like taking another breadth
it felt like a moment of peace
before the waves of the sea rose high
i was eagar to be a part of this gesture
a chance to full fill
a moment of pause from the rest of the world....!!!
nice....ummmm am impressed sweetie...!
ReplyDeleteAll your works seem to be amazing. Although couldn't understand a few works as an amateur in this area, but after seeing your attempts,those made me inspired to give my attempt.
ReplyDeleteSorry if I had changed your version or meaning.I tried my best to key down my thoughts and keep the meaning intact.I added each line after yours to make it rhyming. This is a beginner's attempt and my first attempt.
I anticipate while staring at the door ...
Its not definitely like a chore
the wind passes by very firmly
the sound which makes me feel lovely
like the touch of a feather
in this charming weather
the silence dint make a sound
and the presence made me spell bound
as i dint feel like taking another breadth
it felt like a moment of peace
before the waves of the sea rose high
and before I make a sigh
i was eagar to be a part of this gesture
and make it capture
a chance to full fill
a chance to make my lost energy re-fill
a moment of pause from the rest of the world....!!!
Thx
Abhi
wooww it did change the meaning!! i do like wht u have written. thanq for the attempt. it looks like u have spent quiet sometime on it.
ReplyDelete